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Farewell, friend,
this entire crowd will miss you sorely,
and it's not enough
to deal with this loss by saying we're sorry

We should have paid you homage
before that eerie day
We hope there’s something left of you
to hear what we must say

We promise to spread your story
until our lungs run out of oxygen
You’ll always be in our memories,
till they fade out, deprived of oxygen

We know one song
cannot possibly encompass all your soul
We think, though,
making you eternal musically is our role

You used to speak so lowly
of yourself, but you were the best
Spent so much time being amazing,
had the right to be immodest…

Wherever you are, be sure
your awesome feats took away our oxygen
Compared to you, we’ll always feel
like a bunch of wastes of oxygen

The massive sadness has a
bright side, hard to believe:
it was a pleasure to know
someone who deserves this much grief

We promise to spread your story
until our lungs run out of oxygen
You’ll always be in our memories,
till they fade out, deprived of oxygen

Wherever you are, be sure
your awesome feats took away our oxygen
Compared to you, we’ll always feel
like a bunch of wastes of oxygen
Your favorite (hahaha, NO) author got tired of cynicism and decided to be nice for once. This is how you do posthumous homage to someone amazingly amazing.

I used an easier rhyme scheme, the ever less unusual ABCB, like in Things go happier [link]. Although it fits, I refuse to count the choruses in the scheme because it's a word rhyming with itself. I repeated it notably and used it as the title in order to artificially relate it to the essence to the poem, a trick to make the piece less predictable, which I should do more often.
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Stingley Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013
Nghnggff, sad stuff; I love how sad it makes me feel ;__;
I keep finding your ability to rhyme and make sense in a foreign language TOTALLY AMAZING
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LucasCAPS Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013   Writer
Oh, well, after much training, I can think in English. :D
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